Thursday, October 01, 2009

The Perfect Tease

By Gaurav Parab


Dark eyes flutter to look away

A sequence breaker in a predictable array

She does not care to say much to me

With others her words manage to flow free


A table separates us every now and then

Distances will disappear, but none know when

Reeling me in like bait with surprising strength

Then she decides to let go of some length


She does not care for the rules of the game

The hunter and the prey are just the same

One day she may run out of luck

If she keeps setting fire to the fire truck


How long before she loses a good man

We never started, yet the end began

Sometimes it makes sense to simply walk away

When there is so much left to say


She makes hope float, only to make it sink

A lady in black, and then she is the lady in pink

Her eyes scream and sometimes say please

She is the closest thing to a perfect tease




5 comments:

Nishant said...

Loved it!

Gautam Anand said...

Ahh.. hw I wish .. I wrote tht...
(very close to what I was thinking to write..) ... hope the girl is not the same :) .. nyways perfeclty executed..

Gaurav Parab said...

Thanks Nishant and Gautam

@ Gautam: I will not answer that question :)

Anonymous said...

Since you asked.

It seems from couple of your recent poems that even though you present the woman's actions in the most animated manner you cannot fully understand the feelings behind those, infact you repeatedly fail, if not deliberate, to express your own/the guy's feelings with regard to that. If it’s a narration you desire, you ace it every single time; For the rest, I say you give Pablo Neruda a quick read.

I could be wrong but I feel you hold back. You have been gifted with an incredible mind, but somewhere you need to develop the ability to infuse more heart. You have so much more potential than you realize now.

The Perfect Tease. Again, it never talks about either character's feelings.

That's enough critiquing for a while, you think? :)

Gaurav Parab said...

@ Anonymous: Yes, it is true. Guilty as charged yet again.

Whoever you are, you know what you are talking about.

To write about a beautiful boat, you first have to sail in it.

Similarly, I could take a shot at writing about feelings of either character involved, but then I have to understand them in the first place. The risk is to say things that do not exist, and get burned. Maybe I will one of these days.

After your post, I tried reading up on Pablo Neruda. He sounds interesting. I do not read poetry, I have a couple in my cupboard, but I could not get myself to read them . But now you have mentioned it, I will try to get hold of some of his stuff.

Thank you. Keep writing in.

Regards,